Antigone Cadmus

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As promised, Selene! there were no police to tell me no The word no becomes repetitive. Perhaps, "There were no police to tell me otherwise." This could be a good ...

A J.R.R. Tolkien and Naruto lover! You will be in good company here! I love manga. ^_^ Welcome to YWS! I'm sure a greeter will explain the rules soon enough ...

Hi, Indigo! Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to get critique for your writing, so you should return the favor! Before you post your own work, you should have ...

*sigh* Saying this is going to make me feel very nerdy, but I feel I must... Falador is a town in Runescape! Yes, I used to play Runescape. If you ...

Fasnay...hmm... *considers* perhaps, perhaps. I usually try to give my names meaning... Later in the story actual Werish comes in. My Werish is based off of German. Sooo, if anyone ...

This was extremely good! It leaves the reader hanging and wanting more. I would enjoy reading more. I really didn't find any errors. Well… how about a little music?" He ...

Hey Vox! You're named after your character, eh? ^_^ I just wanted to say that in Latin, nihil is an indeclinable noun. Therefore, I don't think it could be put ...

You're Amniel's brother! Lovely! Onto the critique! We had always before went home together. This is worded awkwardly. I would rewrite it as "Before, we had always gone home together." ...

Hey, Rosey! I really enjoyed this piece. *cracks knuckles* Now we review! a gray pearl I dunno. This bothers me. I picture gray us being lackluster and dull, not pear-like. ...

Eh. Meh. Goodness. This is twelve and a half pages! You can't honestly expect someone to review all of that. I'm sorry, but I can't bring my instructor self to ...

Yay! Edited! This is much, much better. We had just got home from the party and Logan was spending a couple of days here. Kind of a quick beginning. You ...

No. Dear God. Do not read the 1000 page version of The Stand as I did.

Hello, thefireinmeisJC! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today. Who knows what the consequences of an unanswered command could be Knows is present tense. Change it to knew. its ...

Hi, lshryock2. These are pretty good photos. First photograph: I like black and white. It's a little to close to your face to see you very well. Did you use ...